Monday, April 5, 2010
Thursday, March 18, 2010
Editorial Final
With a successful Vikings football season in the books the question on every Vikings fans mind is will he come back? If you don’t know who he is then you probably don’t watch or care to watch any form of TV or read any newspapers. Brett Favre has showed the world that you can still take pro football hits and make a run to the super bowl at an old age.
My personal opinion is that he should come back for at least one more year with the Vikings. He now knows how each of his receivers work and what their skill levels are. He was one of the reasons that Sidney Rice has had a breakout season with 83 receptions 1,312 receiving yards and 8 touchdowns. All of those stats are career best for Rice and they happened when Favre was throwing the pig skin . Brett is a natural leader on the field but some say he is more like a head coach than a player. He changes plays in the huddle or at the line of scrimmage and some critics (packer fans ) think that he is too controlling. I feel that he is a veteran in the NFL and if he doesn’t feel like the play will work or doesn’t like the defensive set up that he should change the play .
Another reason why Brett should be dressed in purple on Sundays is that he is boosting the state’s economy. With every Vikings game now a sell out and purple number 4 jerseys flying off the racks, it is giving the stores and the organization more money to eventually circulate back into the community.
One other reason he should come back is that he is not far from some good career marks. He has said that he wants to reach 500 hundred career touchdowns and he currently has 497. He also is close to 70,000 career passing yards. He currently has 69,329. And most important reason is that he wants another super bowl ring. There are some obstacles in his way if he does come back . One is going to training camp. He said the reason why he waited so long to sign with the Vikings was that he didn’t want to go to training camp, but the greatest obstacle is his age. He will be turning 41 in the middle of the season and many say that’s too old. I say that if he can avoid injury and can throw a ball like a frozen rope like he did this past season then he can play under center for the Vikings anytime….or back up Tom Brady on the Patriots .
My personal opinion is that he should come back for at least one more year with the Vikings. He now knows how each of his receivers work and what their skill levels are. He was one of the reasons that Sidney Rice has had a breakout season with 83 receptions 1,312 receiving yards and 8 touchdowns. All of those stats are career best for Rice and they happened when Favre was throwing the pig skin . Brett is a natural leader on the field but some say he is more like a head coach than a player. He changes plays in the huddle or at the line of scrimmage and some critics (packer fans ) think that he is too controlling. I feel that he is a veteran in the NFL and if he doesn’t feel like the play will work or doesn’t like the defensive set up that he should change the play .
Another reason why Brett should be dressed in purple on Sundays is that he is boosting the state’s economy. With every Vikings game now a sell out and purple number 4 jerseys flying off the racks, it is giving the stores and the organization more money to eventually circulate back into the community.
One other reason he should come back is that he is not far from some good career marks. He has said that he wants to reach 500 hundred career touchdowns and he currently has 497. He also is close to 70,000 career passing yards. He currently has 69,329. And most important reason is that he wants another super bowl ring. There are some obstacles in his way if he does come back . One is going to training camp. He said the reason why he waited so long to sign with the Vikings was that he didn’t want to go to training camp, but the greatest obstacle is his age. He will be turning 41 in the middle of the season and many say that’s too old. I say that if he can avoid injury and can throw a ball like a frozen rope like he did this past season then he can play under center for the Vikings anytime….or back up Tom Brady on the Patriots .
Editorial Edits
Chris Tep
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes,
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
no its a drawing
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
no
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
no paragraphs
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
no
7. Is the writing clear?
no but the drawing was and it was funny
Brian Patten
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes, very clear
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
Yes,its kinda hidden
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
Yes, most of the editorial is attacking the oppostion
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
yes
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
yes
7. Is the writing clear?
Yes mostly but not all the time
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes,
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
no its a drawing
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
no
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
no paragraphs
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
no
7. Is the writing clear?
no but the drawing was and it was funny
Brian Patten
1. Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes, very clear
2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
Yes,its kinda hidden
3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
Yes, most of the editorial is attacking the oppostion
4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes
5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
yes
6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
yes
7. Is the writing clear?
Yes mostly but not all the time
Wednesday, March 17, 2010
Editorial Rough Draft
With a successful Vikings football season in the books the question on every Vikings fans mind is will he come back? If you don’t know who he is then you probably don’t watch or care to watch any form of TV or read any newspapers. Brett Favre has showed the world that you can still take pro football hits and make a run to the super bowl at an old age. My personal opinion is that he should come back for at least one more year with the Vikings. He now knows how each of his receivers work and what their skill levels are. He was one of the reasons that Sidney Rice has had a breakout season with 83 receptions 1,312 receiving yards and 8 touchdowns. All of those stats are career best for Rice and they happened when Favre was throwing the pig skin. Brett is a natural leader on the field but some say he is more like a head coach than a player. He changes plays in the huddle or at the line of scrimmage and some critics (packer fans) think that he is too controlling. I feel that he is a veteran in the NFL and if he doesn’t feel like the play will work or doesn’t like the defensive set up that he should change the play. Another reason why Brett should be dressed in purple on Sundays is that he is boosting the state’s economy. With every Vikings game now a sell out and purple number 4 jerseys flying off the racks, it is giving the stores and the organization more money to eventually circulate back into the community. One other reason he should come back is that he is not far from some good career marks. He has said that he wants to reach 500 hundred career touchdowns and he currently has 497. He also is close to 70,000 career passing yards. He currently has 69,329. And most important reason is that he wants another super bowl ring. There are some obstacles in his way if he does come back. One is going to training camp. He said the reason why he waited so long to sign with the Vikings was that he didn’t want to go to training camp, but the greatest obstacle is his age. He will be turning 41 in the middle of the season and many say that’s too old. I say that if he can avoid injury and can throw a ball like a frozen rope like he did this past season then he can play under center for the Vikings anytime….or back up Tom Brady on the Patriots.
Tuesday, March 16, 2010
Editorial Topic/Questions
1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today?
For my editorial i will discuss if Brett Favre should play one more year for the Minnesota Vikings.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
Brett should come back
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
show facts why Brett would be a good fit with Minnesota for another year
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
Went far in the playoffs
A great Quarterback
Knows the playing style of his team mates
Great leader on the team
Sells out the metrodome
For my editorial i will discuss if Brett Favre should play one more year for the Minnesota Vikings.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
Brett should come back
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)
show facts why Brett would be a good fit with Minnesota for another year
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
Went far in the playoffs
A great Quarterback
Knows the playing style of his team mates
Great leader on the team
Sells out the metrodome
Monday, March 15, 2010
Feature Story Edits
Brian Patten
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
the part where he talks about Brett's vikings stats
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
ESPN and vikings.com, Yes
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
yes when describing Brett's retirement press conference
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
A vikings season review
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
the part where he talks about Brett's vikings stats
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
ESPN and vikings.com, Yes
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
yes when describing Brett's retirement press conference
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
A vikings season review
Feature Story Final
Producing the most talented bunch of NHL players, Minnesota is widely known as the State of Hockey. From the professional team Minnesota Wild, to the Golden Gophers, and many dominate high schools with players being drafted to the NHL after their senior year, to the countless lakes that turn into mini Xcel Energy Centers during the winter and little kids pretend to be their favorite Wild player. Minnesota has also given birth to many Olympic superstars like Lindsay Vonn from Burnsville and Zach Parise from Prior Lake. When asked who was your favorite Minnesota native player in the Olympics one Minnesotan said “Zach Parise”. Both of them famous for what they did in the Olympics, But Zach will always be known as the American who scored the last second goal to send the Gold Medal game against Canada into overtime. Zach was born in Minneapolis but lived in Prior Lake.
As a young child he had hockey in his blood. His dad J.P. Parise played in the NHL for a number of years and even played for the Minnesota North Stars before they moved to Dallas. Zach played peewee hockey during elementary school and middle school but found himself cut from the teams. His dad giving him advice once told him that even the best players get cut. Zach went to Shattuck Saint Mary’s High School. In high school he played some of his best hockey yet. He stayed patient and the goals started to mount up.
Many still believed that he wouldn’t do well outside of high school. During high school he scored 146 goals and 194 assists. In 2002 when he left Saint Mary’s he joined the USA hockey development program. In 2003 Zach put on the Fighting Sioux sweater and scored a hat trick his first game with University of North Dakota. He was named Western Collegiate Hockey Association's All-Rookie Team. In 2003 Zach was drafted to the New Jersey Devils 17th pick overall. Parise decided to stay at UND for another year and was named First Team All-American and a finalist for the Hobey Baker Award. In 37 games is second year as a Sioux he scored 23 goals and had 32 assists. He ended his run at UND with 49 goals and 116 assists. Thinking that he was ready for the NHL he joined the Devils officially and was put at the center position on the second line.
Zach did not play right after joining because the NHL players strike started. The only thing he could do was play for the Albany River Rats in the minor league till the strike ended. The strike ended and Parise was placed on the fourth line. His high school team mate Sidney Crosby played Parise in Zach’s first game and Zach scored first. The crowd was chanting “Zach is Better”, but Sidney rose to be the NHL’s superstar while Parise fought for ice time. Late into the season Parise was promoted from fourth line to second line playing his natural position which was center. He led the Devils to a playoff spot and first in the Eastern Conference and swept the Rangers in the first round, but got swept by the Hurricanes. His rookie season 06-07 he scored 15 goals and 20 assists. He was also named MVP in the Youngsters All Star game.
With his sophomore year ahead of him and the Devils with a new coach Claude Julien, Zach had high expectations and he filled them by scoring 26 seconds into the season. The Devils fought for another first place playoff spot and with Parise now a starter they lost the first round of the playoffs to the Senators. His sophomore stats were 38 goals and 34 assists.
Parise’s break out seasons were from 2007 and is still going on today. He switched to a left wing position and proved that he liked it because he was playing better than being at center. He started to work better with his line mates. When asked how well does Zach play with his teammates Breanna R said “[Zach] Plays very well with his line mates. He normal gets more assists than goals and sets up his team for odd man rushes and break away chances”. He scored 32 goals and 37 assists in the 2007-2008 season.
Zach Parise’s next season was his best seasons of his short career yet. Still playing the left wing position he once proved his dominance on the ice scoring goal after goal. Zach was selected for the All Star game and proved why he is an All Star. Many thinking that he will rise up to be a NHL super star like Sidney Crosby or Alexander Ovechkin. He went on to score 48 goals and 51 assists. He was ranked third in goals overall and Alexander Ovechkin was first. In assists Zach Parise led the NHL for the first time in his career.
Many thought the reason why he was selected to the USA Olympic hockey team was because of his break out season in 08-09. Zach Started the 09-10 season strong in preparation for a two week trip to Vancouver. He currently has 31 goals and 36 assists with two months left in the regular season. Zach was named one of the captains for Team USA and deserved that “C” on his sweater. With other players from Minnesota on his team like Eric Johnson and defenseman from Bloomington and David Backes a forward from Blaine. Zach scored 5 goals and 3 assists including the famous goal with 24.6 seconds left in the third period Parise shoves the puck in the five hole (between the legs) of goal tender Roberto Loungo of Team Canada sending the gold medal game into overtime. Zach celebrated in the corner of the rink in front of a shocked country. Even though Zach scored first his team mate from high school Sidney Crosby scored the gold medal winning goal for Canada.
Zach Parise is one reason why Minnesota is the state of hockey. A Minnesotan native, college hockey icon and a NHL super star and now a Olympic hero for his country and an inspiration for young hockey players pretending to be their favorite hockey player while playing pond hockey on one of Minnesota’s many frozen lakes. The only thing left for Zach Parise to become a NHL icon is a Stanley Cup in is living room in Prior Lake.
As a young child he had hockey in his blood. His dad J.P. Parise played in the NHL for a number of years and even played for the Minnesota North Stars before they moved to Dallas. Zach played peewee hockey during elementary school and middle school but found himself cut from the teams. His dad giving him advice once told him that even the best players get cut. Zach went to Shattuck Saint Mary’s High School. In high school he played some of his best hockey yet. He stayed patient and the goals started to mount up.
Many still believed that he wouldn’t do well outside of high school. During high school he scored 146 goals and 194 assists. In 2002 when he left Saint Mary’s he joined the USA hockey development program. In 2003 Zach put on the Fighting Sioux sweater and scored a hat trick his first game with University of North Dakota. He was named Western Collegiate Hockey Association's All-Rookie Team. In 2003 Zach was drafted to the New Jersey Devils 17th pick overall. Parise decided to stay at UND for another year and was named First Team All-American and a finalist for the Hobey Baker Award. In 37 games is second year as a Sioux he scored 23 goals and had 32 assists. He ended his run at UND with 49 goals and 116 assists. Thinking that he was ready for the NHL he joined the Devils officially and was put at the center position on the second line.
Zach did not play right after joining because the NHL players strike started. The only thing he could do was play for the Albany River Rats in the minor league till the strike ended. The strike ended and Parise was placed on the fourth line. His high school team mate Sidney Crosby played Parise in Zach’s first game and Zach scored first. The crowd was chanting “Zach is Better”, but Sidney rose to be the NHL’s superstar while Parise fought for ice time. Late into the season Parise was promoted from fourth line to second line playing his natural position which was center. He led the Devils to a playoff spot and first in the Eastern Conference and swept the Rangers in the first round, but got swept by the Hurricanes. His rookie season 06-07 he scored 15 goals and 20 assists. He was also named MVP in the Youngsters All Star game.
With his sophomore year ahead of him and the Devils with a new coach Claude Julien, Zach had high expectations and he filled them by scoring 26 seconds into the season. The Devils fought for another first place playoff spot and with Parise now a starter they lost the first round of the playoffs to the Senators. His sophomore stats were 38 goals and 34 assists.
Parise’s break out seasons were from 2007 and is still going on today. He switched to a left wing position and proved that he liked it because he was playing better than being at center. He started to work better with his line mates. When asked how well does Zach play with his teammates Breanna R said “[Zach] Plays very well with his line mates. He normal gets more assists than goals and sets up his team for odd man rushes and break away chances”. He scored 32 goals and 37 assists in the 2007-2008 season.
Zach Parise’s next season was his best seasons of his short career yet. Still playing the left wing position he once proved his dominance on the ice scoring goal after goal. Zach was selected for the All Star game and proved why he is an All Star. Many thinking that he will rise up to be a NHL super star like Sidney Crosby or Alexander Ovechkin. He went on to score 48 goals and 51 assists. He was ranked third in goals overall and Alexander Ovechkin was first. In assists Zach Parise led the NHL for the first time in his career.
Many thought the reason why he was selected to the USA Olympic hockey team was because of his break out season in 08-09. Zach Started the 09-10 season strong in preparation for a two week trip to Vancouver. He currently has 31 goals and 36 assists with two months left in the regular season. Zach was named one of the captains for Team USA and deserved that “C” on his sweater. With other players from Minnesota on his team like Eric Johnson and defenseman from Bloomington and David Backes a forward from Blaine. Zach scored 5 goals and 3 assists including the famous goal with 24.6 seconds left in the third period Parise shoves the puck in the five hole (between the legs) of goal tender Roberto Loungo of Team Canada sending the gold medal game into overtime. Zach celebrated in the corner of the rink in front of a shocked country. Even though Zach scored first his team mate from high school Sidney Crosby scored the gold medal winning goal for Canada.
Zach Parise is one reason why Minnesota is the state of hockey. A Minnesotan native, college hockey icon and a NHL super star and now a Olympic hero for his country and an inspiration for young hockey players pretending to be their favorite hockey player while playing pond hockey on one of Minnesota’s many frozen lakes. The only thing left for Zach Parise to become a NHL icon is a Stanley Cup in is living room in Prior Lake.
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